White dawn

[Ziozark]

Like a dream of winter
I await your cold kiss
During the dawn, across the forest
I die in the snow as I miss

Covered of heavy snow
Death becomes a normal thought
Because it hurts, like a soul-ache
Never been so alone

And it comes again as a death row
We all know that love kills
Along the night I wrote this for her
And for you I take the pills

For the letter, the red seal
For you a torrent of tears
For me just a mistake
That I hope nobody cares

I breathe your name
You consume my life
It's incredible how I loved to death
Or shall we say I became part of it

The blood boiled in my lungs
My vains opened for you
Pain coiled in my guts
And I drained out of love


You, the girl who is non-existent
I await your kiss
And as I drown in depression
Hope I find a way out of it.

--

Sorry if I had a grammar mistake, I translated from the original version that I wrote in spanish

 

[Guarde]

It's nice! And deep... But it's not rhyming. Is it suppost to rhyme after all? Or is it just not because it's the translated version? So many questions xD... My favourite is the first lines. I don't know how to call it tbh.

 

[RefinedBird]

"The blood boiled in my lungs
My vains opened for you
Pain coiled in my guts
And I drained out of love"

Favorite part, good job on the poem

 

[Ziozark]

It's nice! And deep... But it's not rhyming. Is it suppost to rhyme after all? Or is it just not because it's the translated version? So many questions xd... My favourite is the first lines. I don't know how to call it tbh.

Poems don't have to rythm, it's just one of all the literal figure.
You see, Whitman didn't use rythm in his poems, still he's one of the most important poet in English
Poetry is not about rythm, it's about materializing your thoughts in a way that can be readen or heard.

Thanks, I really appreciate that you liked it c:

"The blood boiled in my lungs
My vains opened for you
Pain coiled in my guts
And I drained out of love"

Favorite part, good job on the poem

Thanks! I'll try to do some others without spamming the off topic part ;P

 

[Guarde]

Uh, ehm... Thank you for the information. You probably don't do requests. But could you do a poem about drowning? Would be very interesting...

 

[Ziozark]

Uh, ehm... Thank you for the information. You probably don't do requests. But could you do a poem about drowning? Would be very interesting...

Of course I can; however it's not going to be amazing as it could since I have never drown or lose someone who drown

 

[Kath]

It's nice! And deep... But it's not rhyming. Is it suppost to rhyme after all? Or is it just not because it's the translated version? So many questions xd... My favourite is the first lines. I don't know how to call it tbh.

I think you're talking about a free verse poem (a poem with no set rhythm or meter).

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Ode to Chocolate
Written by myself. FREE VERSE
Heavenly, warm, and divine
sensations
by each minuscule nibble
a short,
but sweet, blissful
moment
for your bustling taste buds
to freely dance and appreciate
chocolate.

Chocolate,
savoring and selfishly
devouring each bite
and chronic smell
to only myself
as if I’m the
only person
in the
world.

But once
its tingling taste
is gone,
its absence
is evident.

Sadness, despair, and regret
refills my appetite with
agonizing guilt
wishing that I could have
carefully savored each
bite.

But I'm pretty sure that poem has a rhyme scheme:

It may not be noticeable at first, but there's a pattern xD
I know this because I had to write a bunch of poems for different assignments.

 

[Guarde]

Of course I can; however it's not going to be amazing as it could since I have never drown or lose someone who drown

I think poems are like rappers. Or rap. Both is art... But you don't have to have been in a situation (like grew up in a ghetto or other stuff) to make an actual good piece. As your poem here looks like, you're pretty good at it. And thank you! Would be really cool to see that in the future.

 

[Guarde]

I think you're talking about a free verse poem (a poem with no set rhythm or meter).

See more

Ode to Chocolate
Written by myself. FREE VERSE
Heavenly, warm, and divine
sensations
by each minuscule nibble
a short,
but sweet, blissful
moment
for your bustling taste buds
to freely dance and appreciate
chocolate.

Chocolate,
savoring and selfishly
devouring each bite
and chronic smell
to only myself
as if I’m the
only person
in the
world.

But once
its tingling taste
is gone,
its absence
is evident.

Sadness, despair, and regret
refills my appetite with
agonizing guilt
wishing that I could have
carefully savored each
bite.

But I'm pretty sure that poem has a rhyme scheme:

It may not be noticeable at first, but there's a pattern xd
I know this because I had to write a bunch of poems for different assignments.

And thank you for pointing that out for me. I never really wrote a poem, and I don't even know how to. Sadly they don't teach us this (further) in school anymore. Only some little things here and there, but...
And your rather funny poem is cool too. I wish I could do stuff like that. cx

 

[Ziozark]

And thank you for pointing that out for me. I never really wrote a poem, and I don't even know how to. Sadly they don't teach us this (further) in school anymore. Only some little things here and there, but...
And your rather funny poem is cool too. I wish I could do stuff like that. cx

I can help you with that If you need any help c:

 

[Ziozark]

I think you're talking about a free verse poem (a poem with no set rhythm or meter).

See more

Ode to Chocolate
Written by myself. FREE VERSE
Heavenly, warm, and divine
sensations
by each minuscule nibble
a short,
but sweet, blissful
moment
for your bustling taste buds
to freely dance and appreciate
chocolate.

Chocolate,
savoring and selfishly
devouring each bite
and chronic smell
to only myself
as if I’m the
only person
in the
world.

But once
its tingling taste
is gone,
its absence
is evident.

Sadness, despair, and regret
refills my appetite with
agonizing guilt
wishing that I could have
carefully savored each
bite.

But I'm pretty sure that poem has a rhyme scheme:

It may not be noticeable at first, but there's a pattern xd
I know this because I had to write a bunch of poems for different assignments.

Thanks for noticing it;p

 

[Guarde]

I can help you with that If you need any help c:

Sure. Anytime but now. I'm watching my favourite crime serious with my parents.